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Post  YouJuChan on Tue Jun 07, 2011 7:38 am



To all the impatient people out there!!
HERE IT IS! The result of the awesome Lyric Contest! ^o^



First of all! Congrats to everyone who went through the whole month writing their very own lyrics! I'm really proud of our BRIANS! Really I don't know what to say but say THANK YOU for being such awesome writers! *_*

THANK YOU for participating and giving me a hard time in judging which led me to ask SitD for help! XD;


I really enjoyed listening to all the entries I got!
Some are really impressive <3 I'm really proud of everyone *_*
So here it iiiis!!!! (The quotes are comments by our dearest Stef who helped me decide! ^o^ <3 )

Why are there so many 'I need a Girl' entries?! xDDDD;;;

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- busanthugs -

Song: I need A Girl

First thing first~ Unfortunately I had to 'disqualify' you for not following the rule :( I think you did an amazing job though! And I feel sorry for being like that but since many of the others wanted to do the same thing, but got a 'NO' I feel obliged to do this ;_____;
STILL! I want to give you some comments about your writing! ^o^
First of all.. This kinda reminds me of American Boy XD I dunno why though LOL maybe because of the Rap-R'n'B mix style kekeke.
Honestly I really enjoyed listening to this *_* And the content.. nice niiice! Totally love it! :) (I love the 'When I'm flippin and trippin and slipping and lippin' totally roxxx imo! <3 )
I'm looking forward to your participation in the next Lyrics Contest (if theres gonna be one xD ) and pleeasseee read the rules carefully <3 hahah!
May I ask.. Whacchu mean with 'Baby Jae's a woman'? HAHAHAHAH!!!

Excellent writing skills. The rap shows creative and well time fitted word usage.

- dbangshinee -

Song: Hello

First...Love your voice! *lol* Why is your singing so awesome? *_____*
Now to the lyrics~ It's really cute imo <3 Really fits the concept and it has a nice story hihihihi <3 Totally can relate to it XP
Some parts were kinda out of beat~ and I think it could've been easily solved by changing some words here and there, the ending was...fast HAHAAH XD; (like.. at first I thought she's just having a crush on him, thinking those words whenever she sees him, but the last part 'Now you are mine' kinda got me off guard XD) anyways~ I still think its cute and all in all you did a GREAT job!

The story is cliché, but aren’t all k-pop songs like that? So that’s not something to stumble on. What I did mind was that words were rushed together to make a sentence and were squeezed in the time-interval. ... Beautiful vocals. Melodic. Pleasant to listen to.

- Firefly -

Song: Wasurenaide

Goosebumps aaaahhhhh *brrrr* ;____; I kinda got teary when I first listened to it (in the subway again lol xD ). It has a sad story and your performance of it totally suits these lyrics *_*
The verse was PERFECT imo, the beat, the words everything just fit perfectly! The 'don't you lie to me' part... wow.. Thats all I can say.. just wow! Really well done! Like.. It felt so... ... true. Like you encountered someone who did that to you ;_;
For me, the flow got lost somehow during the middle of the chorus though, the words at the end were..lengthened (? XDDDD ) which confused me for a little while. But just for a little while cause the ending was really awesome again <3
The whole song was just reeeeaaallyy reaally beautiful *love*

I was surprised that the lyrics were actually the opposite (kinda) of the original. As the song started off I was expecting a sort of English translation of Wasurenaide, but then the word “it is a lie” hit me. Very sad lyrics, true lyrics.

- Hanipazui -

Song: I need a Girl

HAHA Hani XD why you being boy!hani? *lol* 'Could I be your number one guy' caught me off guard XD
Is this BL? hahhahaha!!
The intro was so sexy idek! Not just the intro.. the WHOLE song was pure... how to say? SEKS(SHI)! XD
'I hope you're in no hurry tho' I actually like this part! But something kinda messed the flow >o<
I gotta say though, that I really like your lyrics! Just as I said.. totally sexy *___* And how you sang it.. AWESOME! You perfectly portrayed the hotness :P kekekkeke~~

Pervy Hani ftw! I love what she said/sang in the intro. Very good lyrics, there’s nothing random in it. Everything follows up nicely. Also a good story upbuild. From seducing, to describing, to … the action (but that’s where the song ends xD

- Kyllia -

Song: I need a Girl

L-O-V-E IT! The story is really beautiful (ok.. no its not beautiful since they're breaking up but you know what I mean do you? XD )
You gave a reason for the Break up, I know what's happening, and you chose the perfect words to describe how you're feeling :) Just simple words with a lot of meaning behind them ^^ The beat of your prechorus (or was it still a verse? I dunno right now xD ) was.. how should I say it? It was not bad but there was something that bothered me.. like some beats/words were not exactly on spot (intonation-wise) which makes the whole song a little different ^^
Buuutttt...I gotta say that I especially like your Intro! It's sooo true! ;___;
And the chorus is just.. IN YOUR FACE XD; well.. everything is pretty much IN YOUR FACE rofl.

Good lyrics, she chose her words so that they would match the tempo of the song and there’s still consistency in the story she’s telling.

- Sagacchi -

Song: I need a Girl

*dying inside* AAAAAH I LOVE THIIS SO MUCH I'M DYING XD
Just the 'Ahh' in the beginning makes me burst into laughter already XD And you make me want Uyu too *cries* ;____;
Since I know how obsessed you are.. I totally feel the lyrics! HAHAHHAHA XD Like really...It was just a matter of time when you can't hold back anymore.. and this time just came XD;
The 'I think I need to go to the supermarket' lol! Not really the beat but never mind! :P
And I don't have to say how much I love the chorus do I ? XD

I totally believed her when Saga said “sick of being thirsty”. Very convincing!

- xKeirafanx -

Song: This Song


Huhuuu The lyrics.. Why so sweet and cute and sad at the same time? ;_;
The flow was there the whole time! <3 The last part...gave me goosbumps.. *o* I don't even know what to say more! The story is just really really pretty. Even though the lines didn't rhyme, the flow didn't get lost which is imo a really great thing! I have many favorite parts in here *_* Like I said the last part, and the 'Cause my ears, ma arms, my hand, they are here' aaah that was really pretty <3
You totally did an awesome job <3

The choice of words fits perfectly! The words follow the tempo of the song, and there’s no loss at all of story. Good lyrics, very deep.


Everyone done reading? Good! Cause now I'll reveal who won ;)


Spoiler:
CONGRATULATIONS TO TAMMY AKA FIREFLY!!!!

I really had a hard time! Everyone did such a great job and I totally didn't know whom I should give the 'Gold Medal' XDDD; After thinking about it for many hours I decided to give it to Firefly <3
Tammy! Your writing skills are really awesome! The story of your song was really sad, and I said it already, but will say it again, it brought me tears! I got goosebumps even more because of your voice. Your soulful voice and singing skills fit such songs perfectly! Thank you for participating and congratulations on winning!!! ^o^

Congratulations to everyone, once again, who participated in this! I'm really proud of all <3
Please don't be sad if you didn't win! I assure you! EVERYONE as in EVERYONE did an awesome job! *_*
And since I can see how much effort you put into this contest by writing your lyrics, I decided to give EVERYONE a little present (fanstuff of course XD ). The winner will get a special reward of course ;)

Everyone who participated in this, please send me your address via PM. (except for Saga and Chantelle lol~)
Your Full Name, Address, City, Country.
I'll try to have the stuff ready till next month ^o^


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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  Almighty Cho on Tue Jun 07, 2011 7:43 am

Congratulations to all the participants! :D
And of course especially to the winner, Tammy! ^^
Shall listen later~ xD
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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  xKeirafanx on Tue Jun 07, 2011 7:50 am

Hahahaha, I KNEW IT. The majority chose I Need A Girl xD
Let me take my time listening to everything, you know I'll give individual comments anyway...

But first: Congrats Tammy! I only gave a first listen-over, but I totally love it already.
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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  YouJuChan on Tue Jun 07, 2011 7:57 am

@Meike: And I don't even know why I was surprised by that XD; I already was like 'I think this is going to be a 'I need a girl-lyric-contest' xDDDD;;;

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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  hanipazui on Tue Jun 07, 2011 8:00 am

AHAHAHAHAHA!!! XDDD
I would have took Wasurenaide if I could have rap in it...XDD


AND CONGRATS TO MY AWESOME HUBBY!!!!!!

gonna listen all songs now...^^

totally dead after Ani's song..XDDD


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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  Kyllia on Tue Jun 07, 2011 8:04 am

Can't listen I'm in class nooooo T__T
But congrats to Tammyy I can't wait to hear everyone's songs!!
LOL everyone used I Need a Girl :P I chose that song cause out of the melodies I liked from the choices that was the song I wasn't familiar with so I used it so I wouldn't be influenced by the original lyrics xD

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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  Neorago on Tue Jun 07, 2011 8:15 am

Congratulations to the winner! Nice Job Tammy! :D

and ofcourse the others did a very good job too! :D

@Bigi; Do we get some sort of contest in the future again maybe? :DDDD

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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  YouJuChan on Tue Jun 07, 2011 8:17 am

There will be lots of contest in the future thats for sure ^o^ I just dunno when and what exactly :D

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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  xKeirafanx on Tue Jun 07, 2011 8:42 am

And yay for idividual comments!

busanthugs: Gurl, you got the flow. I agree about that awesome "When I'm flippin and trippin and slipping and lippin" line, it's just WHOA! Sadly you got disqualified, but your rapping really stayed in my mind.

dbangshinee: I tried to imagine that singing bit with the instrumental which was really easy because your voice is SO melodic. After listening to this I feel that I have never recognized your vocals so clearly, shame on me, your voice has a soul-ish vibe I really adore. Now about the lyrics, I feel like they speak to me. I really love how you describe the beginning blooming of a love, your lyrics really have this anticipating feeling to it which I can 100% relate to. I really love it.

Tammy: Q-Q gosh, you are your made-to-sing-everything-voice
I totally loved the verse lyrics, they told a real, sad story and I was really hooked up with listening. Sadly I cannot hear your chorus lines very well and that destroyed the whole picture a bit, because after such a strong verse I expected a strong chorus. Could you enlighten me over the chorus lyrics? I'm sure they are great too, but without clearly hearing them I cannot judge T.T
And your voice is just...*shivers* it was perfect for the lyrics, just perfect!

Hani: Will you ever loose your balls? xD Your song is so typical pedonoona, trademark Hani lyrics. I would put it into the "love making" category next to Robin Thicke stuff. No for real, I feel like your lyrics are trying to turn me on. Good job xD

Ky does it actually bother you that I tend to call you that?: THAT SONG INTRO! Oh God, how much I love it. So wise ^^ The whole song has really mature lyrics, which I love the most. There is no innocence, no naivety, simply admitting that the relationship doesn't work anymore and that is best to end it, though it started with the best intentions. I must say, your lyrics are my favorite.

Ani: Crack-tastic lyrics! All those background noises were just fitting. I was laughing whole-hearty when I listened for the first time. Then I bothered to listen carefully to the lyrics. So, it's about your love for Uyu, that's truly original and typical Ani. Unique as it can be.

No notes to myself.


Regarding this under different aspects
Feel the lyrics: Chantelle and Kyllia. It's because I experienced the feelings both lyrics want to express. If I had been in a situation that is Tammy's lyrics, I could relate to them too, but since I don't, I prefer the other two.
Singing style: Yeah, this was not that important here, but I love how Tammy brings out the message of her song as strong with her voice as with the lyrics.
Rhythm: busanthugs was disqualified, but dem flow is awesome. Hani and Kyllia both had a great rhythm with their things.
Unique: Ani. She writes about her love for Banana milk. If that's not unique then I don't know.

Allover I think it's justified that Tammy won. The lyrics (as far as I got them) are bomb and even though I cannot relate to them, they have an undeniable magnetism and power.
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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  hanipazui on Tue Jun 07, 2011 8:56 am

yup...we'll start to discuss about next contest soon..^^

and Meike: yay for individual comments and yes...
I'm NEVAH gonna lose my balls..
I was hoping the instrumental to be longer 'cos story would have go longer..XDD
you don't wanna know how many times I edited txt to get it not too vulgar..XD

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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  busanthugs on Tue Jun 07, 2011 9:16 am

eh. it happens.
I'm not good with sitting and writing down things.
I did read all the rules, but hey. -shrug-
I had fun.

OH! and that whole Baby Jae's a woman now line, uh. I turn 19 this year? Hah. I'm getting a little older, qualified as a woman. :)

but thanks everyone who liked my flow. I always wanted to freestyle to that beat, never got a chance to. So, thankkksss. :)

and congrats to Tammy! ^_^
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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  Sagacchi on Tue Jun 07, 2011 10:26 am

ok I would've also chosen Tammy *-* i also got little teary when listening!!

but I gotta say... Hani was really sexy and manly and.. ENGLISH XDDD kekeke. i loved that

and I so love Ky's intro, it was so.... sighhhh-tastic :/ (btw @Meike: the nickname "Ky" was originally by me :P at least i dont know about anyone who said it before me)

and..
UHM YEAH, I LOVE BANANA MILK SO WHAT T-T xD
im glad you people liked it xD

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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  Kyllia on Tue Jun 07, 2011 10:57 am

Hehe I'm fine with people calling me Ky :P I think a lot of people started after Saga did xD

And thanks for all the compliments make me so happy *_* Going home soon so I can finally listen~

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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  Kyllia on Tue Jun 07, 2011 11:23 am

@Busanthug - Wow I really like the rapping part but the chorus part sounded a bit off to me for some reason as well as some parts being the same as the original but yeah the rapping was great too bad it was against the rules haha >w<

@Chantelle: So cuute haha some parts sounded like you had to struggle to fit all the words in and therefore sounded awkward but some parts where the words bit the beat well it was really good! Vocally really great too ^_^

@Tammy: Why are you so amazing? *_* If I had heard this before I submitted mine I would've just gave up on mine haha~! Sometimes I can't really tell what you're singing so I miss the meaning at some parts but it sounds so good either way >w<

@Hani: LOLOL YOU NAUGHTY GIRL :P Your lyrics really fit the beat though and sounded very smooth and all those background noises LOLOL

@Saga: LOLOLOLOL ... wow... just wow... and all those sexy noises in the background

@Keira: So soft and pretty and sweet~ I like your lyrics but your voice doesn't really sound like you for some reason haha maybe cause it's a bit lower than usual. Lyrics wise I think I like yours best with some tweaking to make it flow and fit together a bit more but I thought it was so cute and sweet xD

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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  Sagacchi on Tue Jun 07, 2011 12:35 pm

yeaahh at first i thought i shouldnt do the sexy noises because they dont fit..
but then in the end, since the song was already absurd enough, i thought imma just keep the sexy noises just for the REASON that they dont fit xDDD

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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  Firefly on Tue Jun 07, 2011 1:02 pm

Thank you everyone for your kind words!! It really means a lot to me! I uploaded a new version where I"m (hopefully) more understandable XDD; If you still can't hear some parts lemme know and I'll post the lyrics^^

I'll go listen to all the songs later and leave a bit longer comment:3
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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  hanipazui on Tue Jun 07, 2011 1:54 pm

understandable? I TOTALLY could understand you...XDDD
hey hubby...in our family it's me the one with funny accent..XDDDD

Ani & Ky: ENGLISH...X'DDDD it was the male!pedo!noona!?oppa?

I'm gonna work on longer comment too...^^

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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  dbangshinee on Tue Jun 07, 2011 11:39 pm

@ busanthugs:
OH SHOOOO!! your rap was amajing! i was trying to understand it, but it was kinda fast xD
but i like the flow and how you put just a cool "charisma" in it. you did it really great.

@ firefly: first, .. congratulation!! you sang with lots of feel in it. but as the others said, its really sad ;(
but it was beautiful

@hani: HAHAH .. sorry, i don't know why but i laugh at the beginning and at the adlibs, coz' it was too seksi xD but naaah, it was really .. entertaining xD good job!

@ kyllia: "Good lyrics, she chose her words so that they would match the tempo of the song and there’s still consistency in the story she’s telling." - copied and pasted from stef
i agree to that!

(more comments coming soon, since i'm at home and my school starts soon ^^)



edit: so, i'm back xD but i'm lazy right now and i don't want to write a long individual comments >__<''
BUT, i heard all songs and i must say, that you all have really good ideas of writing a lyric and you all sound amajing! :D nuff' said ;)


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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  Chulderella on Wed Jun 08, 2011 4:55 am

o.o' i was waiting for this to listen. when i get time, i'll listen to all of the stuff.
so sad it was during my semester and not during the holiday, so i couldn't participate, but oh well..
-hopes there will be some more contests of that kind-
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congrats to Firefly and to all the participants =D
-runs off, will listen in the evening-

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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  YouJuChan on Fri Jun 24, 2011 11:49 pm

Meike & Hani: I still need your addresses pleashy ^o^ Or don't you want your stuff? Then I'll just keep it nyahahaha :PPPPP

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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  Almighty Cho on Fri Jun 24, 2011 11:56 pm

i have their adresses, if they don't answer xP
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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  xKeirafanx on Sat Jun 25, 2011 2:58 am

I'm so sorry Bigi, I completely forgot sending my address to you. Gomen.
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Re: [Contest 03] Your Song

Post  hanipazui on Sat Jun 25, 2011 8:16 am

I forgot too...XD

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